Am Con students may be getting tired of my going on and on about the importance of writing sentences that provide clear access to the logical relationships between their parts. They may be growing weary of all this attention to what I'm coming to think of as the engineering of the sentence and being asked to write about "X" in 25 words or less. But. . . . . I also notice that Enich used the mimicing exercise to produce a fine description of AmCon itself, a description that also illumines, as we tried to do in 101, the ways that physical space influences social interaction and community values.
From the assigned reading, Pg 164: The activist pietism of the Puritans gave to the Church the duty of reforming the world and so launched into liberalism in politics and capitalism in economics; it was a religion of commitment.
From Enich: The commutative feeling of Hoyme hall gives Amcon the feeling of camaraderie and thus ignites the flames of conversation in class and the hallways of St. Olaf; it makes great for great exchanges.
And Steph, Jake, and Marissa riffed on Cullen's sentence about F. Douglass to write a new sentence about Sex in the City. Their new sentence also helped us to notice a common American narrative, not rags to riches, but from enslaved to autonomous.
From Cullen, page 70: "His account, which traces an arc from dependency to autonomy, is one of the most vivid illustrations of the appeal of the Dream of Upward Mobility-which in his case was quite literal, as he escaped from Maryland to Massachusetts to become a free man."
Same sentence, with a SATC twist: "Her account, which traces an arc from dependency to autonomy, is one of the most vivid illustrations of female empowerment in a major city- which in Carrie's case was quite literal, as she escaped from an unhealthy relationship with Mr. Big to become a free women.
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I'm gratified to read positive comments from students about this exercise and I look forward to the sentences they write in their next essay. LDL
Here you go, DeAne!
From Cullen, page 70: "His account, which traces an arc from dependency to autonomy, is one of the most vivid illustrations of the appeal of the Dream of Upward Mobility-which in his case was quite literal, as he escaped from Maryland to Massachusetts to become a free man."
Same sentence, with a SATC twist: "Her account, which traces an arc from dependency to autonomy, is one of the most vivid illustrations of female empowerment in a major city- which in Carrie's case was quite literal, as she escaped from an unhealthy relationship with Mr. Big to become a free women.
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